http://collegian.csufresno.edu/2008/03/28/putting-academics-first/ Serving California State University, Fresno since 1922. Mon, 13 Feb 2012 20:24:37 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.1 http://collegian.csufresno.edu/2008/03/28/putting-academics-first/comment-page-1/#comment-28115 gm Fri, 28 Mar 2008 16:31:05 +0000 http://collegian.csufresno.edu/2008/03/28/putting-academics-first/#comment-28115 What happened at the end of this article? It started off fine but then became just a series of individual sentences and facts as if the writer simply spewed their notes out on the page. I usually don't criticize the writing in the paper but this was really aggravating to read. Didn't anyone edit this? Is the phrase "student atheletes" hyphenated or not? How about using something other than said? "Marcinkowski said ...," "Marcinkowski said...," "She said." I realize the paper is a learning lab and you are doing difficult work with serious time constraints. However, criticism and correction is a part of the learning process. Go back to the beginning of this piece. That is how your entire article should flow. What happened at the end of this article? It started off fine but then became just a series of individual sentences and facts as if the writer simply spewed their notes out on the page. I usually don’t criticize the writing in the paper but this was really aggravating to read. Didn’t anyone edit this? Is the phrase “student atheletes” hyphenated or not? How about using something other than said?
“Marcinkowski said …,” “Marcinkowski said…,” “She said.” I realize the paper is a learning lab and you are doing difficult work with serious time constraints. However, criticism and correction is a part of the learning process. Go back to the beginning of this piece. That is how your entire article should flow.

]]> http://collegian.csufresno.edu/2008/03/28/putting-academics-first/comment-page-1/#comment-44491 gm Fri, 28 Mar 2008 16:31:00 +0000 http://collegian.csufresno.edu/2008/03/28/putting-academics-first/#comment-44491 What happened at the end of this article? It started off fine but then became just a series of individual sentences and facts as if the writer simply spewed their notes out on the page. I usually don't criticize the writing in the paper but this was really aggravating to read. Didn't anyone edit this? Is the phrase "student atheletes" hyphenated or not? How about using something other than said? "Marcinkowski said ...," "Marcinkowski said...," "She said." I realize the paper is a learning lab and you are doing difficult work with serious time constraints. However, criticism and correction is a part of the learning process. Go back to the beginning of this piece. That is how your entire article should flow. What happened at the end of this article? It started off fine but then became just a series of individual sentences and facts as if the writer simply spewed their notes out on the page. I usually don’t criticize the writing in the paper but this was really aggravating to read. Didn’t anyone edit this? Is the phrase “student atheletes” hyphenated or not? How about using something other than said?
“Marcinkowski said …,” “Marcinkowski said…,” “She said.” I realize the paper is a learning lab and you are doing difficult work with serious time constraints. However, criticism and correction is a part of the learning process. Go back to the beginning of this piece. That is how your entire article should flow.

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